SECOND paragraph SAMPLES

Here are TWO example 2nd-everything before conclusion- paragraphs: Use the as a reference!!

BAD EXAMPLE: To Revise as a CLASS      

Skydiving is listed at the top 3 major adrenaline pumping activities according to Times magazine. My next activity on my bucket list is skydiving. I want to do this because it would allow me to experience adventure and thrill in a stomach-churning sort of way. I know this activity costs money and makes people want to chicken out at the last minute. I also know the closest place to do this thing is in Canada many miles away from Alaska. The benefits I could get are I really like it and decide to become an instructor or I like it even more and decide to be a stunt person in movies. Some potential challenges I could face is my rope break or I get nervous and don’t pull the cord. Another challenge might be that I don’t travel out of Alaska. The best time in my life to accomplish this is after I graduate because I will have money. The best time of year might be the summer, so it is warm. I can prepare but doing other adrenaline stuff and by learning about skydiving. I will need time. My mom will say I am being adventurous and that is good. My dad will worry about me and my friends will want to join.

       After I skydive, I want to travel to India. 

GOOD EXAMPLE: CLASS Created SAMPLE           

According to Times magazine, Skydiving is listed as one of the top 3 major adrenaline pumping activities. Of course I want to complete this mission; it involves adrenaline! It would allow me to experience unordinary adventure and thrill in a stomach-churning fashion. Skydiving will not be cheap, especially since I am usually broke; it might even strip holes in my pocket. 

Due to my fear of heights, I might make like a tree and leaf.  Getting there might also be a challenge; the closest place to do this nerve wracking explosion is in Canada, many light years and sound waves from this cold ice cube tray known as the last frontier.

There are some excellent party favors I could walk away with: deciding to become a surreptitious instructor or stunt devilling as the most hardcore person to have walked the red carpet covered pavement. Some potential challenges I could get smacked in the stomach with: my rope disintegrating, acquiring moths in my stomach, not clutching the slithering cable, or remembering all the dreams I have each night of the time I got thrown out of a moving vehicle; which would prevent my body from plunging off the cliff of the identified flying object. Oh, and what if I don’t even exit Alaska? Then, I’d have some serious issues to reconsider. I know that right now, while I am struggling to buy myself a pack a gum, I probably can’t afford to do this coolness; therefore, I should probably wait until after I graduate and am more secure in my funding missions. 

Never, shall I do this escapade in the winter, for I like all ten fingers and toes (and my ears). I feel my body might circulate temperature better in the summer months.  Before said adventure occurs, even during the summer, I will need some time and confidence in order to succeed this daring masquerade. People are going to talk about this indeed; my mommy dearest will say I am being adventurous because she only wishes she would have thought of this before me and had stone hard guts. My dad, on the other hand, will worry himself into a coma because he has behemoth anxiety issues. Oh, I can tell you this: my amigos will want to tag along (which really means they want some of this epicness as well). I might just take said amigos onto my next adventure, far across the world.

            After I skydive, my coterie and I will head to India.